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RyanB · 07-03-2008, 01:10 PM

I was inspired to write this to my brother Tylah in jail after my second Bro Rhys was sent down. Love you guys.

Im new to this place though I used to once write a few things when i was younger around here, I'd appreciate some feedback, I wanna get my material out there.

Bro,

You've walked a yellow brick road
But with both eyes closed
I came from the streets to the cross
We lived gritty like the lost
You was street wise, im head smart
These brothers cry when apart
Street crime, we went hard
Ones back and forth, one avoided the bars
Like bad boys, but annoyed with half
The mistake we make
We walked a road we didn't create
And the minute you goto get up
It felt like the setup
Cus' your past tends to not let you pass
So you've got the strength
Bend the rule at last
Are we two of Gods, or just two street lads?
So enough with the nonsense
Its tough, but that makes no sense
You've lived rough, thats how your road went
And your still turnin that 1st bend
Bruv', there aint many saints in these endz'
N' the easy days seem dreams away
And what you want aint on the cards
But dont worry its written in stars
So are you big enough to be this?
Can thugs become believers?
I wont hang up my hood
Til' The Good Lord leads us...

© 2008 Ryan B

mutedweller76 · 07-05-2008, 09:40 AM

Really like the flow of this, would sound nice to the beat...

wolf · 07-05-2008, 11:32 PM

hmm, not bad. you drew out some good imagery, but on some parts you general "going through some bad times" you should give examples b/c it puts the readers in question. But if not i understand, some bad times are too personal to express... until later. flowed okay.

Revo1 · 08-21-2008, 05:52 PM

Are you from Britain? I definitely picked that up from the Bruv reference. Either that or I'm talking out my ass. LOL

Nice share. Keep building.

MOWGLI · 09-16-2008, 12:21 PM

im sure your brother appretiates the deep thoughts.
i like the theme of the road and path in contrast with the street and life style.
goodness belongs to those who believe. so go ahead believe.

07-03-2008, 01:10 PM	#1 (permalink)
RyanB Member Join Date: Nov 2007 Posts: 3	The Good Lord? I was inspired to write this to my brother Tylah in jail after my second Bro Rhys was sent down. Love you guys. Im new to this place though I used to once write a few things when i was younger around here, I'd appreciate some feedback, I wanna get my material out there. Bro, You've walked a yellow brick road But with both eyes closed I came from the streets to the cross We lived gritty like the lost You was street wise, im head smart These brothers cry when apart Street crime, we went hard Ones back and forth, one avoided the bars Like bad boys, but annoyed with half The mistake we make We walked a road we didn't create And the minute you goto get up It felt like the setup Cus' your past tends to not let you pass So you've got the strength Bend the rule at last Are we two of Gods, or just two street lads? So enough with the nonsense Its tough, but that makes no sense You've lived rough, thats how your road went And your still turnin that 1st bend Bruv', there aint many saints in these endz' N' the easy days seem dreams away And what you want aint on the cards But dont worry its written in stars So are you big enough to be this? Can thugs become believers? I wont hang up my hood Til' The Good Lord leads us... © 2008 Ryan B

07-05-2008, 11:32 PM	#3 (permalink)
wolf still on the grind Join Date: Jan 2007 Posts: 386	hmm, not bad. you drew out some good imagery, but on some parts you general "going through some bad times" you should give examples b/c it puts the readers in question. But if not i understand, some bad times are too personal to express... until later. flowed okay. __________________ what's crackin ....besides the carter III? --------------------------------------------- "when a man cusses, he doesn't know how to express himself appropiately"...

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07-05-2008, 09:40 AM	#2 (permalink)
mutedweller76 Member Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: USA Posts: 62	Really like the flow of this, would sound nice to the beat...

08-21-2008, 05:52 PM	#4 (permalink)
Revo1 Revolution One Love! Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Michigan, USA Posts: 11	Are you from Britain? I definitely picked that up from the Bruv reference. Either that or I'm talking out my ass. LOL Nice share. Keep building.

09-16-2008, 12:21 PM	#5 (permalink)
MOWGLI Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Posts: 7	im sure your brother appretiates the deep thoughts. i like the theme of the road and path in contrast with the street and life style. goodness belongs to those who believe. so go ahead believe.