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Join Date: Jul 2007
Posts: 14
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She’s been
Raped and abused Scared and bruised All at the hands of a man….who claims he loves her She’s not your typical teenage girl Her name is Ms. Sixteen So young, so sweet So innocent and naive She can’t see that the life she’s living is Destined to end in her demise Cause she’d rather open her thighs Than to get out on her grind and seek knowledge as her prize. She’d rather be pimped by her so-called love Bringing in thousands of dollars at a time As well as black eyes and busted lips Cause she refused to take part in his nasty little tricks Tricks that had her questioning her worth Wondering was this the reason of her birth To live as someone else's personal love slave Giving into any and everything thrown her way See Ms. Sixteen had established herself as a “pro” in the game And no one else could take her place As long as she licked her lips and kept a slim waist And it stayed that way, until Ms. Sixteen met her match Mr. HIV, see he came in and shared his love Now she’s slowly dying of an epidemic, she wasn’t aware of Because all her lovers wore a glove That’s all the protection she thought she needed In her fast life of tricking, loving, and leaving See…. She’s been Raped and abused Scared and bruised All at the hands of a man….who claims he loves her She’s not your typical teenage girl Her name is MS. SIXTEEN And today she died of an epidemic called HIV. Last edited by Sha-Sha : 05-04-2008 at 04:19 PM. |
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Join Date: May 2008
Location: Phoenix, AZ
Posts: 13
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I don't know... Seemed a little cliche' at points, but I thought overall, it was pretty dope.
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Watch Your Back...
Join Date: Jul 1999
Location: Rain City, WA
Posts: 344
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Overall I enjoyed the story-telling and nice rhyme schema. My favorite lines were this:
Cause she’d rather open her thighs Than to get out on her grind and seek knowledge as her prize. flowed really well. nice piece. -theory |
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