My poem - B-Boys.com - Hip-Hop Forums

BlackVoice01 · 06-04-2008, 09:41 AM

I was walking with a ghost, swimming with a ghost
no matter were i go, no matter were i stay
its out of my mind, the ghost swims, the ghost was walking

Supafly · 06-09-2008, 08:01 PM

This poem fascinates me. Very simple, but there's something about it that made me think.

Good work, I'd like to see more.

theory · 06-23-2008, 09:40 PM

I used to write a lot of poetry that was short like this. You should develop the imagery a little more so we can connect to what you are trying to express.

-Theory

06-04-2008, 09:41 AM	#1 (permalink)
BlackVoice01 Member Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 49	My poem I was walking with a ghost, swimming with a ghost no matter were i go, no matter were i stay its out of my mind, the ghost swims, the ghost was walking

Thread Tools
Show Printable Version Email this Page
Display Modes
Linear Mode Switch to Hybrid Mode Switch to Threaded Mode

06-09-2008, 08:01 PM	#2 (permalink)
Supafly Member Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 236	This poem fascinates me. Very simple, but there's something about it that made me think. Good work, I'd like to see more.

06-23-2008, 09:40 PM	#3 (permalink)
theory Watch Your Back... Join Date: Jul 1999 Location: Rain City, WA Posts: 344	I used to write a lot of poetry that was short like this. You should develop the imagery a little more so we can connect to what you are trying to express. -Theory