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I Don't Care - Go Away
Join Date: Apr 2001
Location: Lon-Don
Posts: 26
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I feel drawn into a corner - like someone painting pictures,
Surely life's much happier without figures, I shake off emcees like a dog does with rain, I’m stirring up your brain, just to see the reactions change, The star shines brightly, but your life seems dim, You’re lost from the go, but play back on your emotions like a yo-yo, Most could say so - your one step away from a payroll, But your not quite thinking, us on a ship that’s slowly sinking, Like a Scottish man who can’t stop drinking, (jus for u gaz) Time keeps passing,. Till days seem to fade into dreams, And them whisper's turn into screams, Chorus I feel stranded on an island, filled with lust and hate, looking for the fish but im common bait X2 I taste the rainbow, like a man who’s found his gold, Even if it is traded for his soul, I lose my words, as the Kats got my tongue-brew on it like a mouthful of chewing gum, * My flavors erupt on tracks, they bombs exploding, Like a virus loading, theres no decoding - Jus lyrics flowing, I’m rowing in a bath full of shit and human cum spit, |
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hiphopvillage.org
Join Date: May 2008
Location: Phoenix, AZ
Posts: 13
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It started off pretty strong, I was liking where it was going, and you lost it somewhere in the middle of the first verse. I would digg a little deeper and re-write that shiz.
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